Observation #4

In today's observation the student was from English 101and he came with a revision that's due tomorrow. The tutor reads the paper to himself first to get an idea of what the essay was about. He realize the student paper really needs to be organized and that's what the comment that the professor left on the student paper. The tutor dealt with the structure of his paper first. The paper wasn't a research paper and he did a little bit of research by adding a definition to a word and the professor doesn't want that. The professor rather he write his own opinion to what he believe the word is.  His paragraphs were all over the place so the tutor told him to make sure each paragraph stuck to the thesis, make a connection, always relate back to the thesis. The tutor wrote down a brief description on how the student should structure his essays with intro, body,body, body and then conclusion. The tutor also explain to him when he is going from paragraph to paragraph to make sure the topic sentence relate to the thesis. The student didn't quite know how to write a topic sentence so the tutor showed him. As he showed him this he also showed him how to rearrange his paper rather then writing thewhole thing over again.  When the tutor was confused he asked the student questions to understand what he was trying to say in the paper. The student didn't talk much it seemed as if he was confused so he wouldn't ask anything the tutor did most of the asking questions. As they went through the essay he helped him a little bit with grammar. The tutor had to help the student clarify what was in his own papaer and told him he was to broad rather then just sticking to the topic and talking about exactly what the paper ask for. The tutor told him he needs to be more specific and add more details and explanation. They went through the whole paper and fixed everything the professor asked for. The tutor gives him ideas on what to add towards the end if his essay and how to open a paragraph. The tutor told the student in his intro there should be main response, answering questions, examples and then in the body paragraphs is suppose to be each example from the intro. Wile this is going on the student phone went off and he was focused on his phone for a little while then put it away.  The student had another paper to go over but there was only 15minutes left but they went over it anyways. The tutor skimmed through it first and relaxed its the same problem as the firs paper the student needs to reorganize his paper. Once again the tutor explains how to organize the paper though examples. I felt as if the tutor was repeating himself nonstop.  Also showed him again how to summarize and add more detail and where to add the details towards. T me the student didn't seem to care or wasn't quite getting what the tutor was saying because everything the tutor said he just agreed with and nod his head. The session went over time and instead of going over what they discussed they continued to talk about what they were talking about, the student need to lay out examples in the introduction so that the audience know what he is talking about. The student needed more time so he went and ask could he have more time. This session was mostly teacher student based because the student barley talked and he wanted the tutor to write down everything he said as if the tutor was going to fast for him. This is one experience I never experienced before and won't forget.